Merry Goings

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October 19th, 2017, 11:00 am
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sket0tles October 18th, 2017, 10:14 pm
HuERGH Wow, two chapters now. nice.
I feel like I'm sorta screwing up the pacing here, I'll try to structure it a little better in the future.
Also wow, I was really struggling to get this last page out. (not that it was significantly hard or anything, I just kept getting distracted)
I'll take a couple more days than last time to draw up the first few pages of the next chapter, but then I HOPEFULLY won't take a mid-chapter break this time or something.
Still trying to figure out how I wanna do all this, I might or might not take a day of the week to not upload a page or something, but I don't want to skimp out just due to laziness or something.
Any thoughts, tips, criticism, or scathing insults?
I'd love to hear any anyone has!!
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bwooom October 19th, 2017, 5:35 pm
aaAA im rly excited fr th next chapter!!
fr criticisms/thoughts/tips/ect, imo there should have been more time spent on the ocean? the way it's read, it kind of feels like she was put on the boat, floated for maybe 20 to 35 minutes, and then hit land. i think the size of the ocean and the length of the could have been expanded with some kind of Boat/Ocean Shenanigans (i dont really completely "get" how this world works yet tho so i cant rly provide any examples of what im thinking about tho ah a)
(also im rly sorry if i sounded rude aaaa)
sket0tles October 19th, 2017, 6:13 pm
@bwooom Awesome, thanks for the criticism!
The fact that the ocean was only like a few yards across was supposed to be kind of the joke, though.
Call the chapter "infinite ocean," put emphasis on how it seemed like there was nothing in the waters or whatever, then BOOM, she hit another bit of land, with the boat guy still visible not too far from her. I know, I'm a comedy god.
But really, though, I'll try to get ideas like those across a little better in the future, thanks!